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Task-1
Task-1
Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes
Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes
Common Errors
Common Errors
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Source: Mr Mohit 13-06-24 Day 19
Original Text
The bar graph represents the distinct transport modes utilised for proceeding to and from work in a specific European city over three diversified years: 1960,1980, and 2000. A most noticeable trend is that the utilisation of Cars have been increased ,where as buses, bicycles and Walkers have been decreased in the 40-year period.
Errors:
distinct
utilised
diversified
most
utilisation
cars have been increased
where as
walkers have been decreased
Corrected version:
The bar graph represents the different transport modes used for commuting to and from work in a specific European city over three different years: 1960,1980, and 2000. A very noticeable trend is that the use of cars has increased, whereas buses, bicycles and walkers has decreased in the 40-year period.
Improved version:
The bar graph illustrates the various modes of transport used for commuting to and from work in a specific European city over three distinct years: 1960, 1980, and 2000. A prominent trend is the increase in car usage, whereas the use of buses, bicycles, and walking has declined over the 40-year period.
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Original Text
Between 1960 and 2000, the figure of bus users were continuously fluctuant (17% in 1960, 26% in 1980 and 16% in 2000). However, car consumption was perpetually surged from 5% in 1960 to more than 35% in 2000.
Errors:
figure of
were continuously fluctuant
consumption was perpetually surged
Corrected version:
Between 1960 and 2000, the number of bus users was continuously fluctuating (17% in 1960, 26% in 1980, and 16% in 2000). However, car usage steadily increased from 5% in 1960 to more than 35% in 2000.
Improved version:
From 1960 to 2000, the number of bus users fluctuated, rising from 17% in 1960 to 26% in 1980, before falling to 16% in 2000. In contrast, car usage steadily increased from 5% in 1960 to over 35% in 2000.
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Original Text
Turning to bicycles and walking, the consumption of both these transport modes was consistently declined. Bicycles were used by 25% commuters in 1960 and further to 5% in 2000, while walking was preferred by 34% in 1960, 16% in 1980, 8% in 2000.
Errors:
consumption
was consistently declined
were used by 25% commuters
Corrected version:
Turning to bicycles and walking, the use of both these transport modes consistently declined. Bicycles were used by 25% of commuters in 1960 and further declined to 5% in 2000, while walking was preferred by 34% in 1960, 16% in 1980, and 8% in 2000.
Improved version:
Regarding bicycles and walking, the use of both transport modes consistently declined. Bicycle usage dropped from 25% in 1960 to 5% in 2000, while the preference for walking decreased from 34% in 1960 to 16% in 1980, and further to 8% in 2000.
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Original Text
In general, despite numerous fluctuations can be seen in given graph, it reveals the fact that car was the major significant source of transport compared to others.
Errors:
despite numerous fluctuations can be seen in given graph
was the major significant
Corrected version:
In general, despite the numerous fluctuations seen in the given graph, it reveals the fact that car was the most significant source of transport compared to others.
Improved version:
Overall, despite the numerous fluctuations evident in the graph, it is clear that cars became the most significant mode of transport compared to others.